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‘The advantages of a “surveillance society” far outweigh the drawbacks’. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The development of science and modern technology such as CCTV, DNA databases, biometrics has been leading to the trend of rising subtler criminals recently. The society with the minimum of crimes is probably happened when everything is supervised selectively and considerably. An ideal society is as “a world of surveillance” (Simon Davies, director of Privacy International). Surveillance society is absolutely monitored by a large number of cameras everywhere. Therefore some dangerous criminals will be very stricken because their sins is recorded every as an un refutable evidence. It is often said that the people obtain more benefit than drawback from a surveillance society. This essay will weigh up two aspects of a “surveillance society” to know whether it is really good for the people or not.

Many people complained how much inconvenience they feel under ten thousands of cameras installed in public place such as: on the street, in supermarket, in shop, in car park, in workplace...Nevertheless, we must recognise that the social evils, for example, car theft, burglary, assault, drug use, drunkenness, have been decreased significantly since the system of cameras is operated in public places. Moreover, it is very beneficial in favour of companies who want to monitor their employees from a far distance to eliminate wasted time, cut necessary cost to do business more efficiently.